Some believe that tourism does more to create tension between countries rather than helping individuals better understand other cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

After the pandemic, the
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activity of
tourism
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restruted
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restricted
. It is
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believed
that
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participating
in either group
tourism
or self-initial
tourism
are
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more handly to plan.
Nevertheless
,
tourism
without proper management could result in diverse
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in terms of social and
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cultural
leave. To me, I
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with the statement. There are two reasons as follows.
Firstly
,
tourism
can lead to various
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misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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.
This
issue is about
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mutual respect and
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planning before the trip.
For instance
,
the
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minority tourists
are fail
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to note the instructions
due to
the
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language
issue
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.
This
is followed by the strange action and
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unstratified
unsatisfied
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from local residents. If the tourist, particularly having a trip individually, they should have a well
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planning
in
further
research something which must be cautious.
Secondly
, some heritage
are
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fail to control the
custumer
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customer
flow
thus
putting risk in compensation.
For instance
, some of the
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always
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concentrating
a lot of people
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uniquness
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uniqueness
.
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good management, the capacity of the
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infrastructure
will be
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collapsed
. Eventually, the compensation will be
beared
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by local taxes.
Therefore
, conservation and good
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management
are deem
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neccessary
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necessary
.
To sum up
,
although
there are some positive
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regarding the boost of
tourism
,
such
as
cultrual
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cultural
exchange and economic growth, we should
also
focus on the cost
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education to avoid the above issues.
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task achievement
Try to ensure a more balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument. While you agree that tourism creates tension, also mention how it can foster cultural understanding. This balance will enhance your essay's depth.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, attempt to use more varied linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. This can help present a more logical progression of thoughts.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments, which will make your points more convincing. Use examples that are directly relevant to the argument about tension versus cultural understanding.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the writer's stance on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Main points are outlined clearly and are logically structured, which contributes to a well-organized argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • economic disparities
  • over-tourism
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural exchange
  • mutual understanding
  • personal interactions
  • stereotypes
  • host countries
  • cultural heritage
  • cultural festivals
  • preservation efforts
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