Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Mistakes
are considered really important in
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human
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.
Such
people are being
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judged for making too many
mistakes
whereas
sometime
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also
encouraged to learn from
mistakes
and consider that
mistakes
can make a man more experienced.
However
, there are some people who believe that children should be
avoided
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from
doing
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making
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any kind of errors.
On the other hand
, other support errors and
its
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importance, in
lives
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of
yougster
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youngster
youngsters
. I will discuss
about
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this
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give my opinion later. First of all, when children are supported for making an omission,
then
they are actually becoming more hardworking, patient and accepting. Because many of the time, even adults do not accept their
mistakes
when they are so
matured
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therefore
letting young
ones
know what they did wrong and how to accept and overcome it, is very significant.
For example
, at my daycare, I often see some
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afraid of accepting that they did hit somebody.
Therefore
I ponder
it
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whether it
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is okay for children to make
mistakes
and learn from them.
Also
, guardians are required to make them understand the consequences.
Secondly
, there are pupils who
afraid
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of
situation
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the situation
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, when the young
ones
make
mistakes
.
For instance
, there is
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an opinion
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that
inacuracies
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inaccuracies
can make
youngster
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depressed and lose confidence.
Thus
, mentors can be seen trying to keep away the little
ones
from any kind of slip. Just to be extra protective, some
also
hide
the
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mistakes
to keep
morale
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of little
ones
up so they do not suffer any type of pressure on their mind.
To conclude
, I think it is okay to think about the mental situation for some time but it should be noted that when they are going to grow up, there are huge chances of facing failures and
then
it might be more difficult to accept those than at the young age.
hence
, there is a need
of telling
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youngsters that humans do make
mistakes
but it is okay so that they may not get into severe depression when they come across any blunder in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom to make mistakes
  • critical thinking skills
  • lifelong learning
  • guided learning environment
  • resilience
  • independence
  • overprotective
  • dependency
  • problem-solving skills
  • confidence
  • negative consequences
  • learning process
  • personal growth
  • trial and error
  • balance safety and learning
  • development
  • support and guidance
  • empowerment
  • risk-taking
  • life lessons
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