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People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on community. What are the causes and solutions? an

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Nowadays,
people
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 socialize to a minor degree with their
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neighbors
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 and
it
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apply
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is influence
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 badly on
community
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the community
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. The main
problem
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this
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cause
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causes
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 is
people
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 do not see
necessary
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it necessary
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 to communicate with
livers
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 on the street.
In
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As
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a consequences
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consequences
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,
people
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 might feel lonely and get
along with
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livers
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 it is a good opportunity to get help when you need help. The most viable solution is
an
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apply
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activities
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activity
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, competitions between
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neighbors
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neighbours
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 or camping together. The principal
problem
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 associated with that
people
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 don’t need to socialize with
livers
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 on the street. The result of
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 is solitude, when
person
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the person
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in
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is in
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 isolation. To avoid it we need to converse with
neighbors
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.
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, without communication, resolving
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 issues
such
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 as noise, parking, and shared maintenance. To tackle
this
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problem
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 we should organize a barbecue,
coffee
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and coffee
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 morning and create
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 for
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neighbors
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neighbours
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 to meet each
others
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other
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.
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this
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people
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 started not only greeting but
also
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share with
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sharing
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 daily tips and offering help when needed.
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, recently in Florida was a storm, some homes were totally destroyed and streets were blocked by trees.
People
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 whose houses were damaged
,
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 didn’t know where to go.
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, communication
this
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neighbors
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it
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is
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 a good ability to receive support and assistance when you need help. In conclusion,
do
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not socializing with
livers
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 is a major issue that can result in solitude and increased isolation. To prevent the
problem
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neighbors
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neighbours
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 should take
a
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apply
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part in
a competitions
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a competition
competitions
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, meetings or it is a good idea and opportunity to go
to
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apply
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the
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apply
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camping together and to recognize
a
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neighbors
a neighbor
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neighbors
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 up close
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Strive to refine sentence structures and grammar to improve clarity and comprehension. This will ensure that readers can easily follow your arguments and points.
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The essay clearly identifies a problem and suggests a solution, which is essential for task achievement.
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You provide practical examples, such as the neighborhood activities and the Florida storm scenario, which add relevance to the essay.
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