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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #ryemouth
The provided map demonstrates Ryemouth village from 1995 to now.
Overall
, it can be obvious that the most significant changes can be observed ,especially, to
south
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the south
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 and east of the area ,
while
 the northern and western parts experienced
a small transformations
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a small transformation
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 in the given period over the 29 years, starting from 1995. As regards
to
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apply
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Ryemouth's
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Ryemouth
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, the best alterations in the given periods in order to
being
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go
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 from village to town, the forest park was knocked down, and the farmland was not only reconstructed
to
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into
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golf
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a golf
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 stadium but
also
extend
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extended
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in
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to
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 the northeast part.
In addition
, in there was built a new 2 tennis courts.
In
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On
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 the southwest side, the shop and fish markets have been refurbished
to
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into
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 and café, in turn.
As a result
, the southern fishing part was destroyed, but to western part
was
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apply
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added new
way
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ways
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 and houses to
road
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the
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side
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roadside
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. Interestingly, the hotel and cafe places which are situated in
the
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apply
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southeast Ryemouth remained unchanged throughout the period
29
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of 29
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year
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years
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, starting from 1955
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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