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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph compares the
percentage
 of
work
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the workforce
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force
 in the United
states
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States
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 and
Japan
 between
march
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March
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 1993 and 1999. It is clearly seen that
while
 the
percentage
 of
work
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workforce
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force
 went up considerably in
Japan
, there was a noticeable decline in the rates of
employed
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employment
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 in the USA. As can be seen, the unemployment
rates
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rate
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 in
Japan
 was roughly 2.5
percentage
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per cent
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 before
March
 1993 and rose substantially by 0.5
percentage
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per cent
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 when it arrived
March
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in March
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 1993.
Then
, there was an upward trend until
March
 1994 followed by a fluctuation
just
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of just
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 over 3.5
percentage
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per cent
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 for almost a year. It experienced
a
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partial growth until
March
 1998 before it reached a peak
by
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 about 5% of
work
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the workforce
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force
. In the
last
 year, it witnessed a marginal decline
then
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and then
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 arrived
to
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at
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 exactly 5%. After that, the
percentage
 of
work
force
 in the US was twice the
percentage
 of
work
force
 in
japan
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Japan
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 at first.
Then
, it had a significant fall from 7% in
March
 1993 to 5% in
March
 1999. In summary, it is obvious that
although
 there is
a
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an
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 upward trend in the unemployment rates in
Japan
 and
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a down
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down ward
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downward
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 trend in the US, they arrived
the
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at the
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 same
percentage
at the end
 of the period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, work, force, japan, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • graph
  • trend
  • changes
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • findings
  • observations
  • data
  • statistics
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