The given pie charts show the kinds of subjects Korean students generally choose to study in their private lesson.
There are three pie charts which illustrate the proportion of four different
Korean
subjects applied as their private lesson.Each pie chart displays a student’s preference in each year
which are the years 1960,1980 and 2000.
Overall
,it can be seen that in the first two decades,Korean
students
selected Math as their top priority whereas
English became the most enrolled subject in the year
2000.
To begin
with,the percentage of Korean
students
choosing English increased in the periods given,starting from 23% to reach
the peak at 50% Wrong verb form
reaching
while
Math showed the opposite tendency.Although
in the year
1960,almost half of the Korean
students
selected Math in their private section,the percentage declined gradually to reach the lowest at just over a third.Also
, Science had a similar downward trend with a more rapid decrease.It occupied 30% in the year
1960 followed by a slight drop to 29% in the year
1980.However
,after that year
,Science significantly decreased to 8% in the year
2000.Lastly
,Others had a minority of Korean
students
chosen accounting for 2% at first with a minimal increase to 7% in the year
2000.Submitted by chawanat.pla on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words korean, year, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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