There are benefits to studying abroad, at least for part of one’s higher education. All students should try to include at least one year of a study-abroad program in their university or college education. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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future work, especially, exchange students that will have more
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can learn in abord and
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will get a duo degree that will add value for
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. I strongly agree with
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arrangement
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that will have make more
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opportunity
for
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fresh grad
.
To begin
with, several large companies need
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who have more talented in many ways like communication
skills
, language
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, or computer
skills
, which
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to select them.
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universities
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university
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universities
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created the curriculum for
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era;
in particular
, the " duo degree"
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that
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have
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for
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a university
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in
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and foreign
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countries
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country
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as well and
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will
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more
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in future work and
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earning
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For instance
,
university
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in Thailand created
international
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program that learn in Thailand during
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year to prepare
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knowledge
and
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third year
study
in Australia and back to Thailand
at
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last
year so
this
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interested with students and parents who have
perpective
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perspectives
with benefitcial
study
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.
Furthermore
, it can save time to spend
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educational that
lern
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learn
four years but gain more experience in both countries, so it doesn't have to choose only one country.
Student
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who
be
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an
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exchange in
other
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national
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will have language
skills
more than
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a student
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student
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students
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who
study
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in
country
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the country
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,
hence
it can make companies create an image and credibility for the company that there are capable people in the organization,
in
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most of them
are
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easily adapt
in
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new societies owing to their have experience with international society.
To sum up
,
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degree from
international
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university
or
collage
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college
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will
make
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more
opputunity
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opportunities
with
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future work because it can make a great statement that can
shows
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the experience and
skills
in demand for several large
office
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Task Response
The essay presents a clear position in favor of studying abroad for job opportunities, but it needs more compelling examples and reasoning to fully support this stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports the main argument and that there is a balanced consideration of different perspectives.
Task Response
The essay supports the argument with relevant points, such as the increasing demand for diverse skills in the job market.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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