The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given data is based on the migration to the United
kindom
. The line graph depicts the Correct your spelling
Kingdom
amounts
of time when Fix the agreement mistake
amount
immigrants
stay Use synonyms
intentially
in the UK over Correct your spelling
intentionally
a
eight-year period Change the article
an
as well
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as
the pie chart illustrates the Correct word choice
and
immigrants
' reasons behind migrating in 2008 which Use synonyms
is
based on Change the verb form
are
percentage
.
It Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
is
is apparent that a vast majority of Unnecessary verb
apply
immigrants
stayed up to two Use synonyms
year
, particularly in Change to a plural noun
years
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last
five years, Correct article usage
the last
while
far fewer people stayed from two to four. In 2008, the Linking Words
resean
for migration was working in Correct your spelling
reason
this
country.
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According to
the line graph, by 2008, the number of Linking Words
immigrants
who stayed four or more had remained steady which was Use synonyms
ratively
150, whilst 2 to 4 years stayed Correct your spelling
relatively
immigrants
were fewer compared to other categories which Use synonyms
was
roughly 100 Change the verb form
were
at the end
of the period. In the Linking Words
last
five years of Linking Words
this
period up to two stayed Linking Words
immigrants
were the Use synonyms
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
highst
to Correct your spelling
highest
apporoximately
250.
Regarding Correct your spelling
approximately
pie
chart, in 2008, work had the highest percentage for the reason of migrating which was 38 per Correct article usage
the pie
cent
. Use synonyms
Study
ranked the second highest amount Add an article
The study
due to
the reason Linking Words
of
staying. The contribution of Change preposition
for
accompany
and Wrong verb form
accompanying
join
Wrong verb form
joining
family
was 16 per Add an article
the family
cent
. And 7 per Use synonyms
cent
for no reason. the remaining 7 per Use synonyms
cent
is related to others.Use synonyms
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