The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given data is based on the migration to the United
kindom
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Kingdom
. The line graph depicts the
amounts
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amount
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of time when
immigrants
stay
intentially
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intentionally
in the UK over
a
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eight-year period
as well
as
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and
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the pie chart illustrates the
immigrants
' reasons behind migrating in 2008 which
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based on
percentage
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. It
is
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is apparent that a vast majority of
immigrants
stayed up to two
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, particularly in
last
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the last
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five years,
while
far fewer people stayed from two to four. In 2008, the
resean
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reason
for migration was working in
this
country.
According to
the line graph, by 2008, the number of
immigrants
who stayed four or more had remained steady which was
ratively
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relatively
150, whilst 2 to 4 years stayed
immigrants
were fewer compared to other categories which
was
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roughly 100
at the end
of the period. In the
last
five years of
this
period up to two stayed
immigrants
were the
the
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highst
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highest
to
apporoximately
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approximately
250. Regarding
pie
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the pie
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chart, in 2008, work had the highest percentage for the reason of migrating which was 38 per
cent
.
Study
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ranked the second highest amount
due to
the reason
of
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staying. The contribution of
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and
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family
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the family
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was 16 per
cent
. And 7 per
cent
for no reason. the remaining 7 per
cent
is related to others.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words immigrants, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigrate
  • emigrate
  • migration
  • immigrant
  • intended length of stay
  • short-term stay
  • long-term stay
  • trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • primary reasons
  • comparative analysis
  • contributing factors
  • data interpretation
  • work-related migration
  • study-related migration
  • family reunification
  • asylum seeking
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