The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pictures illustrate the changes made to a
village
named Stokeford during an 80-year period.
Overall
,
while
the original River Stroke and the main road remained almost untouched, there were a variety of residential houses and facilities which had been built to cater for the process of civilization. The S-shaped River Stroke flew through the
village
from northeast to southwest, with a main road running generally parallel to it and crossing the river via a bridge in the north. These features remained basically unchanged in 2010, despite four new branches of roads
were
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added, one forming a circular loop
while
the others were straight.
In contrast
, the rest of the
village
saw substantial development. In 1930, there were farmlands located in the northeastern and southwestern parts of the
village
.
However
, by 2010, these farmlands had been removed, and two shops in the central area were
also
demolished to make way for more residential houses along both sides of the roads.
Additionally
, a large garden containing trees and a large house in 1930 was reduced in size and converted into a retirement home by 2010. Meanwhile, the primary school remained in the same location but was expanded to accommodate more students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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