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In the interest of road safety, cyclists should be required to pass a test before they are allowed on public roads. A To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#interest #road #safety #cyclists #test #roads
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traffic
 security,
bicycle
 racers need to pass an exam,before they can go to
publicity
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 transport.
This
 essay agrees that
this
 is a positive development because they should be accepted as drivers,who need to
aware
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 of road safety and there are a huge amount of
bicycle
 accidents
occur
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 every day. One strong reason, why I totally agree with
this
 statement,we tend to keep in mind that people who drive any
types
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 of
vehicles
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vehicle
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 have to know about road safety.It reduces hurting other citizens and everyone needs to be aware
about
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 how to avoid
traffic
 crashes,particularly car drivers and cyclists.
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,for
bicycle
 riders from Europe is vitally important that before they can officially ride a bike in society
traffic
,they must have some lessons like
drivers
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 and
after
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take an exam. Another reason
,
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is,inappropriate
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inappropriate
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 safety of
traffic
.There are a
big
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 quantity of
bicycle
 disasters,which happen daily in different countries.We can decrease many of them
,
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if cyclists were much more knowledgeable.
For instance
,
last
 week in Peru ,18 years
old
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18-year-old
 girl decided to go on
ride
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a ride
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 without wearing a helmet,but it ended with the worst situation. In conclusion,it is recommended to apply
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test for having
cycle
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 license before getting permission to
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go
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bike and decline having incidents with cyclists.
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Work on providing clearer examples that directly support your arguments. This will enhance the relevance and persuasiveness of your points.
coherence cohesion
Improve sentence transitions to enhance the logical flow between ideas. This will help your essay to appear more coherent.
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Try to introduce more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to articulate your ideas more clearly and engagingly.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
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The response fully addresses the task by discussing both the need for cyclists to pass a test and the impact on road safety.
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There is a good attempt to provide reasons for the opinion stated, supporting the arguments for road safety and the reduction of accidents.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • mandatory testing
  • uniform understanding
  • responsible behavior
  • administrative efforts
  • financial burdens
  • implementation and enforcement
  • deterrent
  • public health
  • environmental impact
  • hand signals
  • traffic laws
  • case studies
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