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Band 3.5

It has been suggested that the cars and public transport should be banned from city centers and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#cars #transport #city #centers #bicycles
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Cars and transport should be prohibited in city
centers
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 and
just
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 bikes be admitted rather.
This
 essay
also
 agrees with
this
 rule because reduces
air
 pollution and stabilizes
traffic
 on the streets. The main reason for the introduction of a
ban
 on transport in central cities is to preserve clean
air
. Most cars run on gasoline and pollute the
air
.
And exhaust
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 fumes harm the human body and create health problems.
Also
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 it’s useful for stabilizing
traffic
 on the streets. Nowadays
traffic
jam
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jams
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is
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 growing too much.
For example
, after
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 decided to
ban
in
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city
centers
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centres
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 the number of cyclists
has
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increased,
air
 quality
has
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improved and the number of road accidents
has
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decreased.
Moreover
, other European countries like Denmark
implements
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alternatively
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rules to prohibit transport. In the same vein, why
this
ban
makes
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 it easier to move around the city
.
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 By
this
 I mean, when the most of
habitants
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inhabitants
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 use automobiles it
makes
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creates
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 a lot of
traffic
jam
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jams
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 and
creates
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discomfort.
In other words
, it’s satisfactory to
keeping
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 people’s time. From the point of view of the economy,
this
ban
 promises to frugality
government’s
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the government’s
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 budget.
First,
the police officer will work less and cameras will regulate
car’s
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the car’s
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 movement.
As a result
,
this
 essay believes
to
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 restriction social carriage should
be
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diminish atmosphere deterioration and
curtails
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curtail
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 gridlock.
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task achievement
Ensure all points are clearly linked to the question; expand on how banning cars and public transport will achieve the claimed benefits.
task achievement
Use clear and topic-specific examples to strengthen arguments.
coherence cohesion
Develop each paragraph fully to maintain the flow; connect ideas logically for a smoother narrative experience.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, which provides a clear start and end to the discussion.
task achievement
The argument about the reduction of air pollution due to banning cars is a strong and relevant point.
task achievement
The use of the Netherlands as an example effectively illustrates a real-world application of the idea.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • banning
  • city centers
  • bicycles
  • public transport
  • positive impacts
  • healthier lifestyle
  • reduction of pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • accidents
  • efficient use of space
  • urban aesthetics
  • challenges
  • implementing
  • bicycle-only policy
  • limited accessibility
  • older people
  • individuals with disabilities
  • infrastructure investment
  • planning
  • alternative transportation options
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