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The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts provide key information about the distances
traveled
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 on both public and private transportation and how long it takes in various European countries . The units are measured in Kilometers and minutes.
Overall
, it is clear from the graphs that
Denmark
 has the most travel long distances
by
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 all ways .
In addition
, the mean
milage
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mileage
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 of
traveler
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travelers
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 by car was 10000
kilometers
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kilometres
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,
whereas
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milage
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mileage
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 of
traveler
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travelers
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 by public transportation
was
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did
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 not
reached
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 1500
kilometers
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.
According to
 what is shown,
Traveler
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Travelers
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on
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in
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Denmark
 ,Italy, U.K and France exceed long spaces by car even they pass the average. Unlike Germany and Spain have less than the average.
On
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 contrast
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travelers
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traveler
 by public transportation were
most
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in most
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of
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countries equal
or
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 less than average except Italy and
Denmark
. In terms of spending time on transport, Germany and U.K spend more than
three quarter
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hour
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hours
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 on transport
while
 Italy does not
reach
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spend
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 half their time.
Furthermore
, were near
Denmark
 and France
Whereas
 Spain half an hour
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 average which is reasonable
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words denmark, traveler with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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