The pie chart compares the reasons for happiness between the two age groups people.
It is clear that
doning
hobbies and Correct your spelling
doing
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achievement
at work makes both two groups feel happier ,Fix the agreement mistake
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while
there are other factors
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what makes Correct pronoun usage
that affect
people
feel happy.
Looking at the charts, the happiest thing for people
is acquiring achievement at work ,people
aged over 30 are 32%, and people
under 30 are 31%.The second thing which can make people
feel happy is doing hobbies. Comparing the people
which is over 30 years of age with people
under 30, those two groups people
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and there gross figures are almost over 50%.
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On the other hand
, besides
the most commendable factors
which make people
happy ,there have
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are
attract
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that attract
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factors
are the remaining there factors
, all of those three factors
are under 20%, with respective percentages is 18%,15%,14
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people
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