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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

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The plans illustrate the transformation of a harbour in 2000 and today. At first glance, it seems the whole map did not change during these years,
however
, the activity of many places has changed since 2000.
First,
many parts are located in the same place
such
 as the car parks and the showers and toilets which are located in the northwest and north public beaches. The accessibility of car parks has moved from the main road to the south road. The use of cattle has changed in the hotel.
Additionally
, the south public beach has changed to a private one for a hotel.
Second,
the area for fishing boats and the marina has been replaced.
Furthermore
, another dock has been added for passenger ferries.
Last
, the newest showers and toilets are located between two car parks on the left of the marina. In summary, both plans show the conversions from 2000 in a harbour.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure clearer introduction and conclusion to bookend the report.
relevant specific examples
Include more specific examples to further illustrate changes in the harbour.
complete response
Appropriate comparison of the harbour's transformations over time.
clear comprehensive ideas
Descriptive language effectively conveys changes.

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