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You recently borrowed an item of clothing from a friend. While you had this item, it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter you should: • apologise for damaging the item of clothing • explain how it became damaged • say what you will do to fix the problem Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

#item #friend #apologise #addresses
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Dear Dorin, I am sorry to be writing with some bad news.At moment .
i
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writeing
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writing
write
you
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to you
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from
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on
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 holiday because is a small
problem
.
This
problem
 is about the item of clothing
what
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 you borrowed me.The
problem
 is
as
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that
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 the ski
jaket
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jacket
 is damaged. I am so sorry that
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 destroyed the jacket, and
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 hope you will understand me. I damaged your
jaket
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jacket
last
 day .when I was
at ski
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 with family.
Moreover
 ,your
jaket
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jacket
 was destroyed from my cause.I broke clothing when I came up from
top
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the top
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 of the mountain with snowboarding.
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this
 time when I
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had
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 a good speed I walked near the trees and I did not feel as
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if jaket
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jaket
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Jaket
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 stopped in the tree.At the final of
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the mountain
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mountain
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 I realized
as
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yourd
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your
jaket
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jacket
is
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 destroyed. I will come home in 3 days and
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first of all ,I will take the
jaket
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jacket
 and will meet with you to resolve the
problem
.In
this
cae
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case
 you have two
opportunites
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 to resolve ,one is I will buy you a new
jaket
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jacket
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jacket
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the jacket
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 to a tailor.You decide. I will be in touch as soon as I am back home. Bye for now,
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coherence cohesion
Try to clarify the expression 'At moment .i writeing you from holiday because is a small problem' to improve coherence. Consider rephrasing as 'I am writing to you from my holiday due to a small issue.'
task achievement
Ensure accurate spelling and grammar. For example, 'jaket' should be 'jacket'. Pay attention to your sentence structure and verb tense, such as 'I writeing you'. Correcting these areas will make your writing clearer.
task achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and apologetic tone suitable for writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
The closing statement provides a reassuring touch, indicating your intent to resolve the issue upon return.
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