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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These three charts show how sodium,
satured
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saturated
 fat and added
suger
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sugar
 may be
unhealty
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unhealthy
 if eaten too much and at
wrong
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the wrong
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 meals. Looking at the first graph, it's possible to see that sodium is mainly integrated at
dinner
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, with a
percentage
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 of 43%, rather than
lunch
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, breakfast and
as
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apply
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snack
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snacks
show examples
 in
this
Linking Words
 order. Regarding the
satured
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saturated
 fat, there is a similar situation to the first chart with a
dinner
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's
percentage
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 of 37% and
lunch
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 as the second meal with a
percentage
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 of 26%. The third chart shows the average percentages of the added sugar nutrient. Here it's
possibile
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possible
 to observe a different situation in which there is the snack meal in
first
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the first
show examples
 position with a
percentage
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 of 42%. 
Dinner
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 is always in
top
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the top
show examples
 2 of most
percentage
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meal
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meals
show examples
, in
this
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 case with a
percentage
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 of 23% and
at the
Linking Words
end
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end,
show examples
 there are
lunch
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 and breakfast with similar percentages. In conclusion, it's
possibile
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possible
 to observe that the meals with the highest
percentage
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 are
dinner
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, snacks,
lunch
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 and breakfast in
this
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 order.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, percentage, lunch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 9 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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