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Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features -

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The two pie charts below display information about the household expenses of an average family in two different years namely 1970 and 2004.
Overall
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 the mortgage is the highest expense in both periods, other life expenses are significantly lower in the more recent year . in depth, the mortgage expense in 1970
takes
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took
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 approximately a quarter of the household income,
this
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 number
doubles
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doubled
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 in 2004 with 50% of the expenditure
goes
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going
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 to mortgage,
in contrast
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, food , clothing and transport in the year 1970 costs were higher by almost 50%, decreasing from 22% to 10% for clothing , 25% to 10% for food, and 13% to 5% for transport .
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 childcare had a dramatic increase starting from 1% in 1970 to 10% in the next period.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the entertainment expenditure
remain
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remains
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 unchanged in both years taking up 13% .

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