The chart below provides information on the number of workers in various occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.

The chart below provides information on the number of workers in various occupations who migrated to Australia between 2009 and 2012.
The bar chart compares different experts segmented into four job categories who emigrated to
Australia
in four years, from 2009 to 2012. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that
Australia
was the most popular destination for
accountants
in all mentioned years, particularly in 2010 which reached the highest
number
of emigrants. Looking in more detail at the data in 2009 and 2010,
accountants
, cooks and software engineers relatively showed high tendencies towards working in
Australia
.
In addition
, except
accountants'
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number
, in 2010, the
number
of two others, cooks and software engineers, remained almost steady.
However
, the
number
of accounting experts significantly increased in
the
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2010. Moving to 2011 and 2012, the data presented
the
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similar trend just as 2009 and 2010.
Nonetheless
, the
number
of migrants in three careers,
accountants
, cooks and soft engineers, marginally declined from 2011 to 2012. In stark contrast, computer programmers did not consider
Australia
as an emigrating destination
due to
the fact that their
number
in these years
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remarkably low compared to other experts.
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  • Migration patterns
  • Occupation categories
  • Significant growth
  • Labor shortages
  • Booming industries
  • Visa regulations
  • Job market saturation
  • Economic downturns
  • Skill shortages
  • Economic contribution
  • Infrastructure pressure
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic predictions
  • Policy changes
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