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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map demonstrates the Garlsdon town
that is
 planned to establish a new
supermarkt
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supermarket
 in
this
 area. In
beginning
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the beginning
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, the potential new
supermarkt
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supermarket
 is aimed to serve 65,000 people. The map clearly shows the
varity
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variety
sections
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of sections
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 of the town to assist the
decison
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decision
 makers
to choose
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in choosing
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 the best site that would help most residents. The first option
ia
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is
 located
at
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in
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 the
middel
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middle
 of
Town
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the Town
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 Center, which is obviously will support
this
 area
sepecially
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especially
 with
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the avalibility
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avalibility
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availability
 of easy access
due to
 the presence
both
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of both
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railway
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the railway
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 and main roads.
This
 option is considered to
filfull
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fulfil
 the needs of approximately 39.000
indviduals
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individuals
 because it is near
fron
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from
 two other
twons
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towns
. The alternative option is
selected
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to select
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at
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apply
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the countryside,
that
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which
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 would be
more
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a more
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 appropriate location because it is going to be reachable to all other different areas.
To conclude
, the first site would be more suitable for the residents
due to
 the
dinsity
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density
 of
population
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the population
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 will be at
this
 site.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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