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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

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The maps illustrate information about
future
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the future
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changing
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changes
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 of Norbiton's industrial zone to
urban
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an urban
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 area.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the city will change from a factorial place to
residential
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a residential
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 area after several years.
Furthermore
,Norberton will be more comfortable. At the outset, the farmland is located in the north after the river.
Moreover
, three factories are placed in the round way in the centre of the city. If another road is built from the
center
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centre
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 to the east, other factories are placed on both sides of the road. After several years Norberton will come to a more residential place.
Firstly
, a new
round way
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roundway
 will be placed near the old one and shops and
medical
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a medical
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 center will appear.
Additionally
, 5 factories will disappear and
instead
 of
them
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their
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 new houses,
playground
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playgrounds
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 and
new
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the new
a new
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school
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schools
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 will
build
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be built
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. What is more, a new bridge and another accommodation will be located near the river. New 3 buildings for living will be appearing in the northern waste side of the city too.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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