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Nowadays transportation is a major problem in every developing city. Many people opine that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than in public transport system. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 developed world, transportation is one of the heated topics. Many believe that the government should focus on spending more money on
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 and highways rather than on public means of
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 to solve the transportation problems of developing cities. I completely disagree with that notion. In my opinion, one of the major issues in terms of transportation in developing cities is traffic jams which can be solved by focusing more on public vehicles rather than wasting money on constructing more
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 with, introducing more public vehicles like bigger buses and trains can
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 a huge number of people all at once.
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, traffic jams are seen more in suburbs where there are no access to trains and buses. People are forced to buy cars and motorbikes
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 limited public vehicles.
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, if public
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 is easily available, every family member of a household will not require a separate car which will ultimately improve air pollution as well.
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, critics argue that improving the
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 and the highways could solve
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 issue. It is true that widening
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 and constructing more underground motorways could potentially decrease a certain percentage of
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traffic
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.
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, it
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 brings other issues
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 as road accidents.
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, a huge percentage of accidents occur
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 motorways.
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, even though spending more budget on
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 could potentially decrease a few
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 issues but
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 still believe that focusing on improving public
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 is
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key. The government should make public
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 like trains accessible in every corner of developing countries.

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task achievement
Ensure to elaborate more on your ideas and support them with more specific examples or data to strengthen your position.
coherence cohesion
Focus on maintaining a clear and logical structure throughout the essay to enhance the flow of information.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, framing the essay well.
task achievement
You have addressed the task by clearly stating your position and presenting relevant ideas.
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