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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islipas it is now and plan for its development. Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islipas it is now and plan for its development. Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data.
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The given
map
 compares information about the buildings in the centre of Islip town now
as well as
 the future plans for its modernization. •From an
overall
 perspective, it can be clearly seen that the future plan is about adding new facilities to the middle of the town and expanding the main road, creating a dual carriageway
while
 new buildings are expected to
be construct
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 in the town of Islip. •
Firstly
, a round dual carriageway will
be construct
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 around the city centre.
Moreover
, there is a plan to change the total structure of the shops located in the north of the
map
.
In addition
, a new bus station, a shopping centre, a car park, and
a
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new housing will be added there
whereas
 the main road inside the area will be converted into a
pedestrain
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pedestrian
 road. •
Also
,
in
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 the west side of the
map
, housing will be shifted to the southwest edge and a new residence will
be appeared
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 beside the park,
while
 the park will be narrowed in size.
However
,
in
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 the south side of the
map
, shops, the school and the residential complex are expected to be unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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