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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?(nv)

#countries #parents #children #home #school #education #nv
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More and more parents think that
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 their children at home by themselves more better than sending them to
school
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.In my opinion ,
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. On the one hand ,some people believe that
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 their children was better than sending them to
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. In fact,
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, they will not meet a kid of the same age .A study published
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 concluded that 90%
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kids who met a group of other kids
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 the same age thy more
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 their life skills.
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, some parents
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 that
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 will offer a study cost,in
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other words the
school
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 cost is not
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necessary
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school
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 uniform or the
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transportation
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school
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 activities,
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serve
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coherence cohesion
Work on creating a clear structure for your essay with a well-defined introduction and conclusion.
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Make sure to fully develop your main ideas with relevant examples to support your arguments.
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Try to address and balance both advantages and disadvantages more thoroughly, providing specific reasoning for each.
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The essay addresses the task by attempting to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of home education.
coherence cohesion
The essay has made an attempt to introduce different points of view, which is a good start for developing a balanced argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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