There is a table showing the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how were pleased during the same two periods.

There is a table showing the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished and the charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how were pleased during the same two periods.
The provided table illustrates the numbers of
people
who visited the Ashdown Museum before the year renovated and the year after. The pie charts demonstrate how visitors were satisfied with their visit over the same 2 years.
Overall
, it is vividly seen that very satisfied
people
increased significantly, holding the second position after restoration. Unlikely,
people
who did not like, saw a remarkable plunge and the number of humans "very dissatisfied" rose moderately, accounting for the maximum amount.
To begin
with, in the year before the upgrade, the fractions of dissatisfied and satisfied human beings were the highest among them, stabilising at 40 and 30 respectively.
Furthermore
, very satisfied and dissatisfied humans and the guys who did not answer the survey
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were differentiated by 5
people
standing at 15, 10 and 5 correspondingly.
However
, after refurbishment, very dissatisfied human kinds went up to 40, being in the first position,
while
the previous biggest one (dissatisfied) experienced a remarkable downward trend, falling to 15. Very satisfied surged considerably to 35,
whereas
no response and very dissatisfied
people
had the same level, being at 5.
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