In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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In certain parts of the World, the number of people with obesity and other health issues related to digestion, rises with a critical speed,
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the accesses and adorableness of fast
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meals.
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, a number of people think that it is necessary for the government to increase
taxes
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on
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kind of
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. I partially agree with
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opinion, and in
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work, I will support it with tied arguments. On the one hand, it is evident that unhealthy
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such
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as burgers and fries contains numerous calories, which cause unlikable affection
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humans
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organisms, causing illnesses
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as obesity, bulimia and high
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of cholesterol.
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, even if unhealthy
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is satisfying, it does not give enough energy to work for a long time. Easy access can
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influence the workforce of the country, and the quality of medical help, owing to the amount of people who suffer from health troubles. Unfortunately,
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of treatment can fall.
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statistics from the USA, every year
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of workers decreases with gradual speed, and it is irrevocable,
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the fact that the fast snack industry there, only rising.
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, a quick snack system is quite convenient for those, who have not got enough time to eat a full and healthy dinner.
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, misapplication of it, as it was mentioned above, has its own sequences. Imposing
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on fast
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can promote a healthy lifestyle, and seek alternatives to them.
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, taking home-made lunch for work, or buying nutritious products
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as yoghurts and many more.
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the price squatness of both,
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can
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influence on societies understanding of what is good and what is bad, because the voice of government, is the strongest argument in the debates about
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question. In conclusion, imposing
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undeniably will have its own advantages and disadvantages,
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in my opinion, the government should put national health conditions higher than the economy of the country, and
taxes
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can help to solve both troubles, with minimum impact on a whole nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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