In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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In certain parts of the World, the number of people with obesity and other health issues related to digestion, rises with a critical speed,
due to
the accesses and adorableness of fast
food
meals.
Therefore
, a number of people think that it is necessary for the government to increase
taxes
on
this
kind of
food
. I partially agree with
this
opinion, and in
this
work, I will support it with tied arguments. On the one hand, it is evident that unhealthy
food
such
as burgers and fries contains numerous calories, which cause unlikable affection
on
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humans
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organisms, causing illnesses
such
as obesity, bulimia and high
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of cholesterol.
Moreover
, even if unhealthy
food
is satisfying, it does not give enough energy to work for a long time. Easy access can
as well
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influence the workforce of the country, and the quality of medical help, owing to the amount of people who suffer from health troubles. Unfortunately,
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of treatment can fall.
For instance
,
according to
statistics from the USA, every year
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of workers decreases with gradual speed, and it is irrevocable,
due to
the fact that the fast snack industry there, only rising.
On the other hand
, a quick snack system is quite convenient for those, who have not got enough time to eat a full and healthy dinner.
Nevertheless
, misapplication of it, as it was mentioned above, has its own sequences. Imposing
taxes
on fast
food
can promote a healthy lifestyle, and seek alternatives to them.
For instance
, taking home-made lunch for work, or buying nutritious products
such
as yoghurts and many more.
As well as
the price squatness of both,
taxes
can
also
influence on societies understanding of what is good and what is bad, because the voice of government, is the strongest argument in the debates about
food
question. In conclusion, imposing
taxes
undeniably will have its own advantages and disadvantages,
on the contrary
in my opinion, the government should put national health conditions higher than the economy of the country, and
taxes
can help to solve both troubles, with minimum impact on a whole nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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