In some areas of US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
When curfew is imposed in a few locations in the United
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young stars are not permitted to go out from home in a certain period at night without an adult. Fix the agreement mistake
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this
statement because Linking Words
teenagers
will be safe and they can spend more Use synonyms
time
with family members.
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age
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accompanied by parents, if they go outside Verb problem
being
then
they can keep out from certain dangers like drug dealers. Linking Words
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teenagers
can easily avoid, if they bring adults with them when they have to go outside at night.
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teenagers
can spend more Use synonyms
time
with their family members and can make strong Use synonyms
bonding
. It is seen that in the teenage Fix the agreement mistake
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people
normally try to Use synonyms
hangout
with their friends, outside. But if they stay at home they can spend more quality Correct your spelling
hang out
time
and make strong Use synonyms
bonding
. Fix the agreement mistake
bonds
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stay home with Use synonyms
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then
their mental attachment will be Linking Words
more
stronger.
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teenagers
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am totally agree
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totally agree
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this
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with family members.Use synonyms
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