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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities.
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The two bar charts show the number of
hours
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 per day that five different
universities
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university
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 students spent; one indicates
weekdays
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 and
anotherfor
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another for
 weekends.
Overall
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, it is clearly observed that students spent more time
to study
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studying
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 during
weekdays
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 in general,
whereas
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that
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apply
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of
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apply
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weekdays
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 were much
fewer
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less
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. On the whole, a closer look at
a bar charts
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a bar chart
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 can
been
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be
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 seen that five students spent more than 9
hours
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 from Monday to Friday
for
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apply
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studying.At 10.6
hours
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,
university
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 C accounted for the longest hour among others, followed by
university
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 B and E at 10.1 and 10
hours
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, respectively. The other
twos
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were
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were also had
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also
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 have
similar
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a similar
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 trend with just under 10
hours
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. In regards
with
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to
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 weekends, it is interesting to note that
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university
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University
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 A spent their study time at
similar
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a similar
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 rate as
weekdays
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 with less than 0.8
hours
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 at 9
hours
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 per day.
However
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,
University
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 D dropped
consideribly
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considerably
of
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by
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 4
hours
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 from 9.6 to 5.6
hours
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 per day. In summary, it
it
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is
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 noticeable that these pupils spent similar
hours
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for study
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studying
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 during lecture days,
hence
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, the figures
are
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apply
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varied during the weekends.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, weekdays, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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