The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities.
The two bar charts show the number of
hours
per day that five different
universities
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students spent; one indicates
weekdays
and
anotherfor
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another for
weekends.
Overall
, it is clearly observed that students spent more time
to study
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during
weekdays
in general,
whereas
that
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of
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weekdays
were much
fewer
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. On the whole, a closer look at
a bar charts
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can
been
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seen that five students spent more than 9
hours
from Monday to Friday
for
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studying.At 10.6
hours
,
university
C accounted for the longest hour among others, followed by
university
B and E at 10.1 and 10
hours
, respectively. The other
twos
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were
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also
have
similar
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trend with just under 10
hours
. In regards
with
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weekends, it is interesting to note that
university
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A spent their study time at
similar
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rate as
weekdays
with less than 0.8
hours
at 9
hours
per day.
However
,
University
D dropped
consideribly
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considerably
of
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4
hours
from 9.6 to 5.6
hours
per day. In summary, it
it
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is
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noticeable that these pupils spent similar
hours
for study
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studying
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during lecture days,
hence
, the figures
are
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varied during the weekends.
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