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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates the
divorce
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 ratio in
Finland
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 and Sweden over the period of 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is evident that
while
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 the
rate
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 of
divorce
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 in
Finland
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 was higher
initially
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, Sweden’s
rate
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 was higher
in
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at
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 the end of the period. Sweden experienced a downward trend;
Finland
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 saw an upward trend throughout the period.
Also
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, both countries’
divorce
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 rates showed some fluctuations. In terms of
Finland
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, the
divorce
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rate
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 was about 35% in the year 2011. In 2012, the ratio slightly decreased to reach around 33%.
However
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,
this
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 figure rose steadily in the next two years, exceeding Sweden’s
rate
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 in 2015 to reach over 40%.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
divorce
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 in Sweden was about 45% in 2011, being higher than
Finland
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’s percentage by approximately 10%.
Then
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, it peaked at around 50% in 2012, after which it firmly declined, hitting its low point of about 37% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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