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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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These graphs demonstrate data on how much quantity of Australian dollars took by exporting and importing
products
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 to three countries,
China
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,
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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, between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the value of the Australian dollars that got by supplying and bringing in goods from
Japan
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, between 2004 and 2009 increased considerably,
while
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 trade
of
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apply
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the exporting to United
States
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 and purchasing
products
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 from Australia
almost
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 unchanged throughout the period.
However
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, the country
China
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 was the one that showed
best
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the best
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 trade with Australia throughout the duration. As regards the figure of
the
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apply
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China
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 ,
although
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,
trend
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the trend
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 of
the
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apply
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importing
products
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 from
China
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,
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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States
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begun
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began
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20
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at 20
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 billion
in
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 the beginning of the time span ,that of in country
China
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 demonstrated
best
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 increase ,
in contrast
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 with
ratio
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a ratio
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 of importing
products
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 from
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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States
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.
Furthermore
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,trend of the buying
products
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 in Australia from the
Japan
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 and United
States
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 was unaltered by
end
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the end
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 of the
perioud
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period
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, china, japan, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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