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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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These graphs demonstrate data on how much quantity of Australian dollars took by exporting and importing
products
 to three countries,
China
,
Japan
 and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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, between 2004 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the value of the Australian dollars that got by supplying and bringing in goods from
Japan
, between 2004 and 2009 increased considerably,
while
 trade
of
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apply
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the exporting to United
States
 and purchasing
products
 from Australia
almost
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was almost
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 unchanged throughout the period.
However
, the country
China
 was the one that showed
best
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the best
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 trade with Australia throughout the duration. As regards the figure of
the
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apply
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China
 ,
although
,
trend
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the trend
a trend
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 of
the
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apply
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importing
products
 from
China
,
Japan
 and
United
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the United
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States
begun
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began
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20
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at 20
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 billion
in
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at
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 the beginning of the time span ,that of in country
China
 demonstrated
best
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the best
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 increase ,
in contrast
 with
ratio
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a ratio
the ratio
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 of importing
products
 from
Japan
 and
United
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the United
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States
.
Furthermore
,trend of the buying
products
 in Australia from the
Japan
 and United
States
 was unaltered by
end
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the end
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 of the
perioud
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period
.
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