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The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the proportion of mobile phone users who use phones
in
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 diverse purposes from the year 2006 to 2010.
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,
throught
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throughout
this
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 5-year period the percentages of people who use phones
on
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 the purpose of making calls, sending and receiving text messages were higher than other
usges
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usages
uses
users
,
whereas
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 there
were
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 less desire
for using
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to use
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phone
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the phone
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 in order to
playing
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 music and
recording
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 video.
According to
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 the table, in comparison
with
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apply
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playing music and recording
video
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videos
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, making calls, and sending and receiving text messages had the highest percentages, the former was between 12 to 35 per
cent
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 and
latter
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the latter
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 was between 66 to 100 per
cent
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. Taking
photoes
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photos
 had the third highest amounts in usage
it
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apply
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starars
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stars
 at 66 per
cent
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 in 2006 to 76 per
cent
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 in 2010. Regarding searching the Internet, there was not any data in 2006;
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 41
percent
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per cent
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 in 2008 and a gradual rise to reach 73 per
cent
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 in the
last
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 year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • features
  • usage
  • between 2006 and 2010
  • trends
  • increasing
  • decreasing
  • popularity
  • basic features
  • advanced features
  • internet browsing
  • playing games
  • significant changes
  • emerging trends
  • speculate
  • comparison
  • over time
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