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The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph provides information about the requirement for electricity and the
energy
 available from fossil fuels in Freedonia between 1985 and 2005.
Overall
, it is evident that the
energy
 demand experienced a gradual decrease, before a slight increase,
while
 the
energy
 availability observed a rise, after a minor drop throughout the period given. Looking in more detail, the
energy
 demand commenced with 5
energy
units
 in 1985,
although
 it saw a modest decline of almost 200 billion megajoules.
By contrast
, fossil fuels
energy
 availability began with just under 4
energy
units
, and it
followed
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 by a slight increase by 1990.
Additionally
, citizens of Freedonia required
the
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approximately constant
energy
 until 1995,
along with
 200 billion megajoules.
Nevertheless
, the
energy
 existence experienced an upward increase by 1995 to about 7
energy
units
. With regard to the remaining data, the
energy
 available observed a gradual decrease by around 250 billion megajoules, followed by a stable fluctuation till 2005.
Furthermore
, the
energy
 demand rose significantly to 7
energy
units
 by 2005.
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