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The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph shows the demand for energy and the energy available for fossil fuels in Freedonia from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph provides information about the requirement for electricity and the
energy
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 available from fossil fuels in Freedonia between 1985 and 2005.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
energy
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 demand experienced a gradual decrease, before a slight increase,
while
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 the
energy
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 availability observed a rise, after a minor drop throughout the period given. Looking in more detail, the
energy
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 demand commenced with 5
energy
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units
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 in 1985,
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 it saw a modest decline of almost 200 billion megajoules.
By contrast
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, fossil fuels
energy
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 availability began with just under 4
energy
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units
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, and it
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 by a slight increase by 1990.
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, citizens of Freedonia required
the
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approximately constant
energy
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 until 1995,
along with
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 200 billion megajoules.
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, the
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 existence experienced an upward increase by 1995 to about 7
energy
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units
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. With regard to the remaining data, the
energy
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 available observed a gradual decrease by around 250 billion megajoules, followed by a stable fluctuation till 2005.
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, the
energy
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 demand rose significantly to 7
energy
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units
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 by 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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