the chart below give information on the location and types of dance clases young people in a town in australia are currently attending. summurise the information by selecting and reoprting the main futures and make comprisition where relevant

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The pie

chart

below illustrates the locations of

dance

classes

where young Australians are attending and the bar

chart

provides information about the types of

dance

and amount of

students

taking the

classes

Overall

, from the pie

chart

we can see that more than half of the

dance

classes

for children under 11 are conducted in private and college-based

studios

. Particularly private

studios

have 48% and college

studios

have 10% proportion.

On the other hand

, young

people

between 11 and 16 are attending

dance

classes

in school halls after school with a 24% proportion.

Also

, 18% of teenagers are taking

classes

in community halls and other places.

In addition

, given bar

chart

shows the number of

students

and

dance

types that Australia's young generations are attending.

For instance

, we can see that 900

people

are taking Ballet

classes

, where 600

students

are under 11.

Furthermore

, about the same amount of

people

are participating in Tap

dance

classes

, where approximately 550

students

are under 11 and 425

people

are between 11 and 16 years old. As for Modern

dance

, over 900

people

are learning it. Namely, over 500

students

between 11 and 16 are taking Modern

dance

courses,

as well as

300 children are participating in Modern

dance

classes

. Taking everything into consideration, among

youngster's

Change noun form

youngster

show examples

private

studios

are popular with 48% proportion.

Besides

that, Ballet is more popular among children under 11 and Modern

dance

is preferable between 11 and 16 years old teenagers.

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Overall Band Score

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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243 words

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