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Band 3

In order to solve traffic problems government should tax private car owners heavily and use their money to improve public transportation What are advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

#traffic #government #tax #car #owners #money #transportation
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I think there's a lot of effort in
this
 matter
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 reduced traffic congestion lots of
people
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owners
 cars and private may discourage
people
 from buying and
a
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owners
car
 in the vehicle and
this
 is leading to encourage a lot of traffic and every
people
 driving a
car
 but some
people
 not give
owners
 heavily after that I my
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 that they should replace cars with more public
transportation
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this
 would be advantage side and public transport systems making them more effort reliable for
everyone
in my
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opinion
this
 increases public
transportation
 because
this
 is very comfortable for
everyone
 There are
also
 disadvantages to
this
 In my
opinion
lot
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 of
people
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a provider cars
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a provider car
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 can be a financial strain
an
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and
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 middle nowadays are every
people
 should be
private
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the private
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car
 because it is comfortable and It makes our rounds shorter
help
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everyone
 and
lower income
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lower-income
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 individuals who rely on their
car
especially
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 public
transportation
 might not meet
everyone
 after that in my
opinion
 that If suddenly have an urgent task public
transportation
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move
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 as fast a
car
 In
conclusion
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 taxing private
car
owners
come
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apply
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reduce
reduse
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reduces
 traffic and
this
 is
car
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a car
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 pollution environment but public
transportation
 improves in
the
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every
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city
citiy
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city
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coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and logically develops from the previous one. Use linking words effectively to guide the reader through your arguments.
task response
Develop your main ideas more thoroughly with specific examples or explanations to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
task response
The essay correctly identifies a potential solution to traffic congestion by taxing private car owners and improving public transportation.
task response
The essay includes both advantages and disadvantages, which addresses the task's requirements.
coherence
A conclusion is present, which summarizes the main points of the essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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