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the bar chart shows the amount of energy produced by wind in four countires from 1985 and 2000

the bar chart shows the amount of energy produced by wind in four countires from 1985 and 2000
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The given graph illustrates how much
energy
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 was produced using wind in four countries (India,
Denmark
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, Germany, and the US) over the years 1985 and 2000. Units are measured in
megawatts
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that the majority of
energy
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 generated by wind was in the US at the beginning of the given period,
however
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, it was produced mostly in
Denmark
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 in the
last
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 year.
Moreover
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, an increased trend was seen in all countries,
while
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Denmark
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 experienced the most significant growth. In terms of the US and Germany, the amount of
energy
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 produced using wind was 1200
megawatts
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 in 1985, it
then
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 peaked at over 1600
megawatts
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 in 1990. A slight decline was seen in the amount of
energy
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 to reach approximately 1500
megawatts
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 in the
last
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 year.
Likewise
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, 400
megawatts
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 were produced in Germany in 1985,
this
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 figure increased steadily to reach around 900
megawatts
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 in 2000.
On the other hand
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, India and
Denmark
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 produced around 200
megawatts
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 in 1985.
This
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 figure rose sharply to reach 800
megawatts
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 and 1200
megawatts
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 respectively. In the final year, the amount of
energy
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 produced in
Denmark
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 exceeded that of the US to become the highest with more than 1600
megawatts
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, denmark, megawatts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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