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Writing Task 2 Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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It is considered that a human starts learning many aspects in life since birth
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from both formal and experience gained, which is understood by the term ‘education’. Once children
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 to a certain level or matured to a level of thinking, parents enrol them
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 primary schools
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to feed them with
knowledge
, so that a productive human being shall be released to
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society by the end of the education process, which is normally to be by university.
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 formal education system which is in the past or currently in place is mainly on theoretical aspects of the
knowledge
 needed to build a fruitful life ahead. But there’s always a problem
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 students
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using or applying the
knowledge
 gained from school in practical scenarios faced in real life. As an example, back in
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 I was taught that plants need oxygen to grow or reproduce but I haven’t witnessed my theoretical
knowledge
 gained. A child should be given the theoretical facts needed for relevant principles taught, but in the
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time
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 the practical skills as to how to implement the theoretical facts learned should be taught as well. For
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example, children should have skill development sessions in school with time allocated from practical sessions for science over theories learned in class. It should be a balance of both theoretical and practical lessons. End of the day it’s not what
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 books
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 matters, but how we make use of the
knowledge
 in books which matters.
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To improve the task response, ensure that you express a clear opinion throughout the essay and maintain a consistent stance. You should also aim to address all parts of the question by discussing both sides if necessary.
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For coherence and cohesion, work on improving the logical flow between paragraphs and within them. Using clear topic sentences and linking phrases can enhance the readability of your essay.
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The essay addresses the topic by discussing the importance of balancing theoretical and practical learning, which is an essential part of answering the question.
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There is a clear effort to structure the essay with an introduction and a conclusion, providing a framework for your thoughts.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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