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the diagram bilow shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. summirise the information by selecting mainfutures and make comparisons where it is relevant

the diagram bilow shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. summirise the information by selecting mainfutures and make comparisons where it is relevant
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The diagram below illustrates the cycle of
ethanol
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 production, which is commonly used as a
biofuel
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.
According to
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 the given data,
biofuel
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 production's start and end points depend on the gas called
carbon
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dioxide
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.
Firstly
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,
ethanol
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 production starts with the photosynthesis process. During the process,
plants
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 and trees grow using sunlight and
carbon
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dioxide
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, and they produce oxygen and carbohydrates.
Secondly
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, grown vegetation is harvested and transported to a pre-processing area, where
they
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it
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get
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gets
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 ground by special machinery. After the pre-processing,
plants
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 are turned into cellulose which is
then
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 transferred to the processing area. As follows in the processing period, cellulose turns into sugars
due to
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 chemical reactions, which are used as food for microbes.
Moreover
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, microbes consume cellulose sugars and produce a gas, namely
ethanol
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. In most cases,
ethanol
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 is used as a
biofuel
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 for cars, trucks, and planes,
therefore
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 transports use
ethanol
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 as a fuel and they produce
carbon
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dioxide
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 fumes, which are used in photosynthesis again. Taking everything into consideration, naturally,
plants
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 use
carbon
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dioxide
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 as a
food growing
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food-growing
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 source, and
plants
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 are turned into
ethanol
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 by biochemical processes. in the same way,
ethanol
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 is used as a
biofuel
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, and it later produces
carbon
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dioxide
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, which is
renewable
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a renewable
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 energy cycle source.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol, biofuel, carbon, dioxide, plants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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