You are a member of an International Students’ club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter • offer to make a popular dish from your country • describe what this dish is • explain why it should be included in the event

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Dear Mr. Luis, I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I would like to make a very famous Indian food

dish

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for

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the event which

is organise

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is organised

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the student'club

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student'club

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student club

. I am Ashish Kyada from

India

, one of the members of the club.

India

is famous for

food

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its food

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apply

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all over the world.

Hydrabadi

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Hyderabadi

biryani is one of the most favourite

dish

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dishes

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India

. I would like to describe the look of

this

dish

starts

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with the basic, boiled basmati rice used to

preapre

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prepare

dish

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the dish

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. Rice mixed with vegetables and beans.

Morever

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Moreover

dish

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the dish

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consist

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consists

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of some spices and

decorated

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is decorated

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with

cutted

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cut

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coriender

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coriander

leaves.

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, Biryani

serve

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with

the

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apply

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curd. We called it "Raytu" in our native language. Because of the taste of

this

dish

, Biryani is not only famous in

India

but

also

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all over the world now.

This

is the main reason why

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would like to present

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the event. Looking forward to hearing from you and thank you for your time. Yours Sincerely, Ashish Kyada

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language

Ensure the subject and verb agree in all sentences, for example 'the event which is organised by the student club'.

coherence cohesion

Vary sentence structures more to enhance the flow of ideas and readability.

task achievement

The letter provides a clear and complete response by covering all the bullet points in the task.

coherence cohesion

The use of paragraphs helps to separate different ideas, making the text easier to follow.

task achievement

The tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter, strengthening the connection with the event organiser.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

170 words

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