Some people think it is better to have many short holidays during the years. Others believe it would be beneficial to have fewer longer vacation. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some argue that short
breaks
provide more variety and relaxation,
while
others contend that extended vacations offer deeper rejuvenation and the chance to explore different destinations. In my opinion, despite shorter days, having frequent time off from a
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job will be
healthier
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option. There are several benefits to having short
breaks
. One and foremost is reduced stress and avoiding burnout. If a person gets some short
breaks
, he will be more relaxed and never get bored with his daily schedule.
Moreover
, it
paves
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great
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impact on the productivity of the organization as the person after coming from
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will be more active and
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tasks with
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mind more efficiently.
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work
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10 hours a day, he will get 3 days to relax. so
this
is the best way to be proficient in
work
.
On the other hand
, many people believe
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a longer vacation
instead
of a
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. One of the apparent advantages of a longer vacation is relaxation and rejuvenation. people want to disconnect
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their daily routine and
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disconnect
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work
. Another one is to travel
distant
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locations .
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person who
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far away from his family
he
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want to
mmet
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meet
their family so he
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much time to travel. So
this
is
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reason to have
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a longer
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vacation.
According to
my
prespective
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perspective
, in
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fast-paces
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environment shorter
breaks
are more
beneficals
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beneficial
as it prevents
from
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burnout, maintain
work
life and balance productivity
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work
place.
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task achievement
Ensure each supporting point has specific examples and detailed explanations.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure to enhance clarity and fluidity in argument development.
coherence cohesion
The essay clearly introduces and concludes both views, providing a balanced discussion.
task achievement
Covers all parts of the task with relevant points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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