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You were doing a short course at another country. All of a sudden, you had to leave the course and fly back to your home country. Write a letter to your teacher, and in your letter – express your gratitude – explain why you had to leave – explain what part of the course you enjoyed the most

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Hello teacher Osama , I'
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 writing
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 your class including the pupils.
firstly
 , I'
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 very happy to have a course with you , It was useful for me
also
 in my future ,
Moreover
 , you have given me a lot of private courses , It was not required ,
However
 , you were very interested in giving us the whole concept in the best way . I want to apologise because my wife has been pregnant for 8 months and next month we going to get a new baby,
Therefore
 , I have to be beside my wife and
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 my child ,
Moreover
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 so sorry that I couldn't complete my mission .
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 enjoyed it when you taught us about
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maths skills, in my opinion, you are special in
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maths and you can explain
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 a very easy way , Whole my life I couldn't understand
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maths ,
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, with you , it was so easy . Thank you so much ,
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 glad to have been one of your students ,
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 looking forward to hearing back from you
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coherence cohesion
Try to maintain a clear logical structure throughout your writing. Consider organizing each idea in separate paragraphs for better readability.
coherence cohesion
Proofread to avoid small grammatical errors, like punctuation and capitalization. For example, start sentences with a capital letter and check comma usage.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a suitable greeting and closing which fits the context of writing to a teacher.
task achievement
The expression of gratitude, explanation for leaving, and sharing an enjoyable course aspect are all clearly covered in the letter.
task achievement
The writing tone is respectful and appropriate for addressing a teacher.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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