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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the
percentage
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 of Australian
males
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 and
females
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 who regularly participated in physical
activity
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 in 2010.
Overall
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, the proportion of
females
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 engaging in physical
activity
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 showed a slight upward trend across
age
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 groups,
whereas
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 the
participation
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 rate for
males
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 fluctuated more significantly. For
females
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, the highest
participation
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 rate was observed in the 55-64
age
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group
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, where just over 50% were regularly active.
This
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 was a noticeable peak compared to younger
age
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 groups.
However
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, after the
age
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 of 64, the
percentage
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 of
females
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 involved in physical
activity
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 declined slightly, remaining just above 50%.
In contrast
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,
males
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 exhibited a different pattern. The highest level of
participation
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 was seen in the 15-24
age
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group
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, where over 50% of
males
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 engaged in regular physical
activity
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.
Participation
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 dropped significantly for those in the 35-44
age
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group
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, which recorded the lowest
percentage
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 of active
males
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. Interestingly, the
percentage
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 of
males
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 participating in physical
activity
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 rose again in the 65 and over
group
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, reaching approximately 48%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, males, females, activity, age, participation, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Percentage
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participation
  • Age group
  • Trend
  • Significant
  • Notable
  • Gender gap
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consistent
  • Decline
  • Progressive
  • Conversely
  • Motivations
  • Barriers
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