These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays travelling for tourism become much easier than in the past.
Therefore
, people take more benefits and explore new places. In
this
essay, we will discuss how
advantages
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of development
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the
disadvantage
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To begin
with, tourism boosts
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economy of the country as there will be more employment and government income will
also
increase through taxes. People can explore new places by visiting different countries because
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accessibility like uncomplicated immigration and more options available for flights and hotels so it will be
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Secondly
, by increase in tourism will definitely benefit the whole ecosystem from street vendors to
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hotel owners and to all travel agencies, taxi
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drivers
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,
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and flights
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flights
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companies.
Moreover
, humans
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get an advantage by visiting different countries they can learn new words of the native language
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explore new dishes which haven’t been tasted before. There are
also
several disadvantages many
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time
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content creators and travel bloggers
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wrong hype towards a particular place ,
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which many of us visit and waste our money. Sometimes locals
also
face struggle because
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many places are overcrowded throughout the year, so they don’t get any peace.
Furthermore
, many times
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travellers
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throw garbage anywhere splitting here and there
due to
which local people become victims of dirtiness. To solve
this
issue government can make strict rules and regulations it will see positive results.
To conclude
, travelling always being more advantageous than disadvantageous so one shouldn’t stop exploring new countries.
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task response
Expand on the disadvantages to provide a more balanced perspective. Ensure both advantages and disadvantages are developed with equal weight.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to enhance logical flow and connections between ideas, improving coherence.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support the points made, which will strengthen your arguments.
task response
The essay presents clear main ideas regarding both the advantages and disadvantages of easier travel for tourism.
coherence cohesion
The essay concludes effectively by summarizing the key discussion points and offering a final perspective.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost local economies
  • cultural exchange
  • mutual understanding
  • environmental degradation
  • deforestation
  • overcrowding
  • commodification
  • authentic cultural experiences
  • revenue
  • perspective
  • globalization
  • sustainable tourism
  • heritage sites
  • local customs
  • appreciation of diversity
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