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The chart and table provide data about cars registered in one country over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table provide data about cars registered in one country over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and table highlight the information about traffic registration in one country, particularly the new cars from 2003 to 2015. The table
show
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shows
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 the used
persentage
Correct your spelling
percentage
 of
engine
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engines
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such
 as
petrol
, diesel and hybrid,
while
 the line graph provides data about the
petrol
 price.
Overall
, the most expensive
engine
 was in 2011 and 2013 and the cheapest one was in 2003. The citizens of
this
 country used
petrol
 gasoline more often than the other
typies
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types
 of power sources.
Furthermore
, the hybrid type was not common among the population. As can be seen on the charts, in 2011 and 2013 people had approximately the same price
of
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apply
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engine
. There was about 1.49 and 1.48 pounds per litre. The average cost was in 2005, 2007, 2009 and 2015, when it was from 0.9 to 1.05 pounds.
The most
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Most
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 part of
money
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the money
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 went
on
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to
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petrol
.
However
, its popularity has decreased over time. In 2015 approximately
two thirds
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two-thirds
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 of people
prefered
Correct your spelling
preferred
this
 type of
engine
,
while
other
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the other
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 38.6% used diesel and hybrid sort in the new cars.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words engine, petrol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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