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The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920.

The diagrams below show changes that have taken place in the Sawry District neighbourhood since 1920.
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The map charts illustrate the changes
of
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 Sawry
district
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 over the century from 1920 to 2020. As can be seen, the comparison of maps shows that the new version of the
district
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 has become more modern than the older form. In 1920, in
this
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 area, a sparse view of the city could be observed. In the
center
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 was Oak Avenue, which divided the
district
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 into northern and southern sides, running from east to west. To the north of it was the Tulebug Bros. cannery. On the opposite side of
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 factory was Prestwich Primary School, with Miller’s Lake located underneath it. In summary, in
this
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 year, there were 6
houses
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, four of which were
sited
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on
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 the northeastern part of the
district
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. A shop was located under Oak Avenue, between
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two
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the two
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 remaining
houses
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. The beach was connected with the Elmwood River, which was in the top right corner of the map.
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, there were 13 trees, almost half of which were set in the lower part, and the other half in the upper. Turning to 2020, the
district
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 was changing
due to
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 urbanization with
buildings
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 and residences. The Tulebug Bros was replaced by the Yang Office Complex. At the bottom of the map, four trees were removed, and in their place, an expanded version of the school was built. On the site of the old building, a gas station was constructed, with
two
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 dormitory
buildings
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 built on its right side, which were on the site of a destroyed house. On the far right,
two
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 more
buildings
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 were constructed in the form of private
houses
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. In the middle of these different types of residential
buildings
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, there was a shop, to which another one was added. In the northeastern part,
two
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 private
houses
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 were demolished, and another apartment building was constructed. Next to the Elmwood River, the bike path was constructed, which resulted in the disappearance of the beach.
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,
the
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 bridge was erected, which crossed that river.
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, Miller's Lake, Oak Avenue, 9 trees, three private
houses
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, and the store remained unchanged."

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Vocabulary: Replace the words district, houses, two, buildings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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