Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today*s world and should be closed.What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?
Nowadays, mass
is
pondering on disadvantages caused by animal parks and a lot of believe these should be shut down because of the problems other living beings face Correct subject-verb agreement
are
due to
it. Like many
creatures are actually losing their instinctive abilities Correct word choice
Many
about
which I will discuss in upcoming paragraphs Change preposition
apply
futher
followed by Correct your spelling
further
another ways
to animal parks if these get closed in Replace the adjective
another way
other ways
Correct article usage
the forseeable
forseeable
future.
Correct your spelling
foreseeable
Firstly
, various living beings have their own way of living. However
, when they are brought to zoos, they become dependable on humans for not only their food,
but for their safety as well. Remove the comma
apply
Hence
, there are chances of them to lose
their inherited skills of attacking predator, ability to make their survival in terrain and tough weather conditions and getting food for their survival. Change the verb form
losing
For instance
, Lions and tigers are animal
who find their own nourishment Change the noun form
animals
according to
their body needs and keep going around the jungle running, saving themselves from predator
. Obviously, it is not possible in animal parks for Fix the agreement mistake
predators
animal
to live as their life should be and Fix the agreement mistake
animals
thus
they will definitely fail to keep innate things in them.
Secondly
, if by any chance zoological places closes
soon in future, Change the verb form
close
then
there numerous
alternatives to keep forest creatures in way better than Add a missing verb
are numerous
traditional
way of keeping them. Having natural conservation areas, which may be Correct article usage
the traditional
largers
, open but still restricted for any kind of hunting and logging of trees. Where wild beings can live by themselves without any interference Correct your spelling
larger
large
of
humankind. Change preposition
from
For example
, In India, there is natural
conservation park, where several endangered and other fauna are closely monitored Correct article usage
a natural
with out
any Correct your spelling
without
interfernce
Correct your spelling
interference
interferences
and
altering anything so that they can get Correct word choice
or
most
out of Correct article usage
the most
natural
setting.
Add an article
the natural
To conclude
, Zoos are having negative
effect on the upcoming generations of fauna Add an article
a negative
however
there different
Add a missing verb
are different
startegy
like conservatives that are proving more logical and beneficial for creatures.Correct your spelling
strategies
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The essay addresses both the problems zoos bring and potential alternatives, demonstrating a completion of the task.
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- Conclusion
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