People nowadays are surrounded by all kinds of advertising. Advertising affects what people think is important and it has a negative influence on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, advertising become one of
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Consider expanding the introduction by clearly stating your viewpoint and outlining the main points you will discuss. Use more complex sentence structures to enhance fluency.
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Develop the essay further by including more specific examples to illustrate your points. Ensure each main point is adequately supported.
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Work on structuring your paragraphs so they have a clear main idea and supporting details or examples.
Task Achievement
Try to present a balanced argument by discussing both sides in more depth, and ensure that your opinion is clearly stated throughout the essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay's introduction touches on the main topic and presents an intention to discuss the influence of advertising.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumer culture
  • Material possessions
  • Idealized lifestyles
  • Unrealistic standards
  • Low self-esteem
  • Privacy concerns
  • Target individuals
  • Technological advancements
  • Health products
  • Public services
  • Free content
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