The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four

European countries.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of
money
spent on 6
consumers
Change the noun form
consumer
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goods
in Germany, Italy, France,
Britain
Correct word choice
and Britain
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. The initial impression is that British
costumers
Correct your spelling
customers
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spent more
money
on
consumer
goods
,
while
German
people
spent the least. As can be seen, British
people
spend just over 170
thousand
pounds
on photographic film which was the largest expenditure among
consumer
goods
. They
also
spent more than 162
thousand
pounds
on toys and CDs,
while
France had the second place with just below 160
thousand
pounds
,
on the other
hand
Add the comma(s)
hand,
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personal stereos, tennis racquets and perfumes were the least considerable
goods
at 150, 142 and 145
thousand
pounds
, respectively. that France
people
spent
money
on them.
It is clear that
,
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apply
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spending
money
on all
consumer
goods
was very similar between
Germany
Correct your spelling
German
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people
at approximately 150
thousand
pounds
. In comparison to spending
money
in Germany, spending
money
on all
consumer
goods
in Italy was different
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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lowest point was related to personal stereos with 150
thousand
pounds
and
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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point constituted
to
Change preposition
apply
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spending
money
on Toys with almost 160
thousand
pounds
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, goods, consumer, people, thousand, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.

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