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The maps show how the industrial area will change into a housing area in the future Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show how the industrial area will change into a housing area in the future Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures above illustrate two maps
from
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of
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 an industrial
land
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, one
show
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shows
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 cases the future development plans,
while
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 the other one pictures it at
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the peresent
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peresent
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present
 time. The area is going to be reused as an accommodation site in
near
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the near
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 future. First of all, the area as it is now
,
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apply
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 shows a basic
land
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 with a town in
west
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the west
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 part and
a
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apply
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farm
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farmland
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land
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along side
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alongside
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 the river under it in the north section. More importantly, a road passes the zone and
connectes
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connects
connected
 to the
round about
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roundabout
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 in the central part.
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, the factories are all located around the
round about
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roundabout
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 and a branch of the it which is
paralel
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parallel
 to the main road.
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, huge changes have
planed
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planned
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 for
this
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land
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, which mostly
includes
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include
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 the removal of the factories and
repalcing
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replacing
 them with houses.
Firstly
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, it can be seen that a bridge is constructed above the river and
connectes
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connects
connected
 to the new housing section beside the
farm
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farmland
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land
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. Other than that, a playground and a school are going to be built on the
land
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.
Submitted by Taha Sol. on

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Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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