The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

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The graph illustrates to rates of 4 types of

games

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' sale numbers in the digital

game

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industry between 2000-2006.

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, the table shows Handheld

Games

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rate always top of each

year

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. The rates are not under the 12 billion dollar all

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, Mobile Phone

Games

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didn't have any

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in 2000-2001.

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, the

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industry has just 2 types of

games

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in 2000, these are Console

Games

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and Handheld

Games

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In addition

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sales

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rates were under 12 billion dollars in 2000. The

sales

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find a top place in 2006, Althoug, Console

Games

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crease the lowest level of the chart in the same

year

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On the other hand

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, we can notice

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the growth of the industry easily from 2001 to 2005. The numbers are increasing

year

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year

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and the amount of money is rising in the

game

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's bazaar.

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, Mobile

Games

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rise from 2002 to 2006 with the same growth.

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, the

game

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sales

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found almost 36 billion dollars in total.

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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

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