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The chart bellow gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart bellow gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the scales of
education
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 of Bulgarian
people
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 who decided to go abroad in 2002, 2006, and 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the level of secondary
education
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 more had demand in all
years
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. Lower and primary
education
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 raised more each year than in previous
years
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 and
people
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 with higher
education
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 had less demand to leave their country. In 2002, we observed that going abroad at the level of secondary
education
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 was the most popular among
people
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 and its percentage was exactly 65%.
This
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 group decreased to 61% over time in 2006. Lower and primary
education
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 and higher
education
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 were at the almost same rate during these 2
years
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.
First,
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the proportion of
people
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 with higher
education
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 was 17% in 2002 but enhanced to one-fifth percentage in 2006,
however
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 primary and lower
education
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 grew by 1% from 18% to 19% between 2002 and 2006. In 2008, the number of secondary
education
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 decreased, as in 2006, to 59%.
Also
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, higher
education
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 had a significant decrease to 9%. But, primary and lower
education
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 surged to around one-third which was considerable demand in
this
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 group during the
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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