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A chart shows the total number of minutes peopel spent on telephone in UK decided in 3 categories

A chart shows the total number of minutes peopel spent on telephone in UK decided in 3 categories
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bar chart illustrates the number of minutes people spent on the telephone, divided into three types in the UK in the period from 1995 to 2002.
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, it is crystal clear that individuals mostly
preferred
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 calls on the telephone rather than talking on mobiles. On the one hand, we observe that local calls recorded with 70
billion
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 minutes in 1995 witnessed a steady increase of 18
billion
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 until reached their peak in 1999 at 90
billion
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 minutes before returning to the same number in 2002 at 73
billion
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.
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, both the national and international calls started from 35
billion
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 and faced a gradual rise by reaching 50
billion
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 in the
last
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 years.
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, mobile calls were the least favoured ones in the initial years but reached 40
billion
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 in the end.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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